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It’s only water? Tell that to a drowning boy.

19 Apr
It's only water? Tell that to a drowning boy.

The rain is pouring down into the well. Wells are meant to hold water!

Hello everyone and welcome to my blog. The Basement: Robbie’s Rite of Passage is my first novel. It is a Suspense/Thriller aimed at an upper Middle Grade/ Young Adult audience (pre-teens & teens). The Basement is a coming of age story about a pre-teen named Robbie and the many issues he faces in his young life (bullying, verbal abuse, alcoholic father, puppy love . . . ) and how the encouragement and support of his mom, friends and neighborhood heroes aid him in the task of overcoming these obstacles. You will feel an array of emotions as you read this novel ranging from indignation and sorrow to laughter and delight, not to mention a bit of thrills and fright.

Please enjoy a chapter from THE BASEMENT, and let me know what you think in the comments below. Your opinions mean a great deal to me and will help me develop further as a writer. Thank you!

Joshua Rush as Robbie

Rescue Delayed

Before leaving to go get help, Nestor had cleared away the plants that concealed the well. Robbie and Barney were really beginning to worry. For a while, Robbie and Barney could look up at a circle of blue, but now the sky was somber, and rain poured down in buckets. The sun would set soon, and even the feeble light that allowed them to see each other would disappear. Robbie wondered what would happen if Nestor and the others returned after dark – would they be able to find the well again?

The boys had no choice but to wait, even though the rain did not relent and the water was rising.

“We’re going to need to stand,” Robbie said in a wobbly voice.

Barney nodded—he had also noticed the rising water. He tried repeatedly to get to his feet, but his efforts were futile. He sat rocking back and forth, wincing and groaning in pain.

Robbie passed his hands along the walls to try to find something he could hold onto. His hands came across something he believed to be part of a tree root. He scrunched his brow and pulled on the root to test its strength; it seemed to be anchored securely to the wall of the well.

“Barney, I found something attached to the wall that I can hold onto while I try to stand. It feels like tree roots. Maybe there’s something that can help you get to your feet on your side.”

Barney made efforts to pass his hands over the walls near him, but each twist and bend of his body was like sharp, hot knives slowly entering his flesh. He howled in pain and closed his eyes tightly, clenching his jaw.

“Are you okay?” Robbie asked with a worried grimace etched on his face.

“I’ll be all right.” Barney was breathless. “How about you? Can you stand up?”

Robbie grabbed the root with his right hand and pushed himself off the ground with his left arm, but an excruciating pain in his right leg prevented him from standing. As a consequence, he fell back to the wet ground and into a seated position. He groaned. He knew now he could not lean on his right leg and figured he probably fractured a bone when he fell.

The rain continued to pour, and the water level in the well kept climbing. Robbie bit the corner of his lower lip and made another attempt to get up, gripping the root with both hands and putting his whole weight on his left leg. Doing so, he was able to rise. The effort of standing had made him dizzy, and he faltered off balance. He rested his back against the wall to steady himself. As he tried to move closer to the wall, his foot slipped, and he almost fell again. When he finally got his back up against the wall of the well, he let go with one hand. He stared wide-eyed at Barney, who was almost submerged. Robbie extended his free hand. “Try to reach for my hand.”

“I can’t move. Everything hurts.” Barney grimaced in pain and moaned.

“You have to try. You’ll drown if you don’t! Please try!”

“All right, I’ll try again.” He strained with all his might to reach his hand. A screaming pain shot through his legs when he moved. His right arm throbbed, and his ribs ached terribly. Barney winced and wailed in agony. He began to wheeze as it became difficult for him to breathe. He was in bad shape. Barney moaned and shook his head. “I can’t.”

“Come on! You can do it!” Robbie encouraged him. “The water’s rising fast!”

The water level reached just above Robbie’s knees. Only Barney’s head and his shoulders were above the water. He needed to get on his feet quickly before the water covered him completely.

Barney reached his arm out as far as he could, but he could barely reach Robbie’s fingertips. Robbie’s hand was only eight inches away from Barney’s, but it might as well have been a hundred feet away. It was no use—he could not elevate himself. Even if he managed to reach the outstretched hand, Robbie was not strong enough to support his entire body weight. Barney’s broken legs could not sustain him, so he gave up trying. There was a squeaking, creaking sound when he breathed.

“Barney, don’t give up.” Robbie’s voice was heavy with sadness.

“I’m sorry I can’t get up. I really did try. I gave it my all. I think both my legs are broken and I can’t breathe right anymore.”

Robbie’s heart sank as he heard his wheezing. He bit his lip, his eyebrows drawn in. He wanted to help his friend, but he could hardly help himself. What would Superman do now? was all he could think at the moment.

It was getting dark in the well. The boys could no longer see each other. Robbie’s heart beat hard against his chest. His breathing was fast and shallow. He worried mostly about the water rising above his friend’s neck and drowning him. He lifted his eyes, but it was so dark he could not even see the opening to the well anymore. All he saw was darkness. He decided to pray.

“God, I know you can hear me even from down here. Please save my friend. I know you usually help those who help themselves. Barney did try to get on his feet, but he just didn’t have the strength to do it. Please stop the rain from coming down. Don’t allow my friend drown.”

Robbie closed his eyes while he prayed, although it would not have made a difference if he had kept them open. It was pitch black in the well. He looked up again and opened his eyes. He continued to feel big drops of rain tumble from the sky and mix with his tears.

“Barney, talk to me?”

“I’m still here, buddy.”

“Let’s keep talking to each other, just so we’ll each know the other’s all right.”

“Sure, but it’s not going to be easy for me. Every breath hurts.”

“All right, how about I just check up on you every so often. All you have to say is ‘OK’ or ‘I’m fine.’ Is that good?”

“Yes, Rob-bie, that’s fff…”

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91 Responses to “It’s only water? Tell that to a drowning boy.”

  1. Sunni Morris April 19, 2013 at 10:15 pm #

    Vashti,

    That’s quite a story you’ve got started.

    Sunni

    http://sunni-survivinglife.blogspot.com/

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 19, 2013 at 10:47 pm #

      Hi Sunni! This is a chapter from my novel, The Basement. It will be releasing soon. Thank you for stopping by, and for the comment.

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  2. Menopausal Mother April 20, 2013 at 1:35 am #

    Great chapter to your book and congrats on getting it published. Thanks for following me via GFC. I am already following you through Facebook under the name Marcia Kester Doyle. Thanks again for sharing.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 20, 2013 at 2:21 am #

      Thank you very much Marcia! I’m glad you stopped by. Thank you for following too. 😀

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  3. toninelsonmeansbusiness April 21, 2013 at 12:04 am #

    Thanks for visiting my site:) Very suspenseful chapter! Great illustration.

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  4. Meryl S. Fortney April 21, 2013 at 9:16 am #

    I found your great blog through the WLC Blog Follows on the World Literary Cafe! Great to connect! Hope to see more from you 🙂

    -Meryl S. Fortney, the only transsexual indie author who writes space-opera fiction!

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  5. Jessica April 21, 2013 at 4:31 pm #

    Hi Vashti,
    What a good insert for your book. Thanks so much for sharing this with us @ The Show Off Blog Party! I’m intrigued now.

    Jessica
    The Wondering Brain

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 21, 2013 at 9:02 pm #

      Hi Jessica! Thank you so much! I’m so glad you enjoyed it. Please come back, there’s more to follow. 😉

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  6. Heather Topham Wood April 22, 2013 at 12:03 am #

    Great work! New follower via WLC, thanks for stopping by my blog!

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 22, 2013 at 12:21 am #

      Thank you so much Heather. I’m so happy you enjoyed the post. I appreciate the visit and comment.

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  7. jwestbooks April 22, 2013 at 3:51 am #

    Hi Vashti,
    Wow! I really enjoyed that! Thank you so much for sharing.
    I will be on the lookout for The Basement 🙂
    Best wishes,
    James

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 22, 2013 at 5:24 am #

      Hi James! Yay! I’m so happy you enjoyed my post. Thank you so much for stopping by, and for your kind words. I’ve been posting once a week because I’m busy working on a novel. I’ll try to make the posts interesting. Thanks again! 😀

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  8. warratahstree April 22, 2013 at 5:19 am #

    The drawing drew me in. Great story.

    Handmade at Warratahstree

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 22, 2013 at 5:30 am #

      Yes, it is a very captivating illustration. The artist’s name is Denise Spencer. She also illustrated the image for the book cover, and several others for inside the book. Thank you very much for stopping by and for leaving a comment. 🙂

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  9. denise616 April 22, 2013 at 6:52 pm #

    Hi Vashti. Thanks for stopping by my blog. Enjoyed the chapter! Good luck with your book.

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  10. Doreen Sargente April 23, 2013 at 1:49 am #

    You pulled me in and didn’t let go! Loved it! Keep ’em comin!

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 23, 2013 at 2:13 am #

      I’m so happy to hear that! Thank you so much. I will definitely keep ’em comin! 😀

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  11. ssgannett April 24, 2013 at 6:14 am #

    Thank you so much for the comment and follow for This Momma’s Ramblings! I return the favor gladly…What a wonderful excerpt…I got to the end looking for more, way to go!

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 24, 2013 at 4:44 pm #

      That was the whole idea! I’m so happy you were intrigued. Thank you for visiting, and commenting on my blog. 😀

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  12. françoise MICHEL April 24, 2013 at 6:57 am #

    it’ s very nice text, we live the same moments that the heroes
    good writing
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  13. Erin @ The Grass Skirt April 24, 2013 at 11:05 am #

    Thank you for visiting my blog! This is SO good. You’re very talented. 🙂

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  14. Lori Ann @ Lori Ann's Food & Fam April 24, 2013 at 3:01 pm #

    Hi Vashti,
    Thank you for the “sneak peek” of your book. You’ve definitely got me wondering what’s going to happen next. Great job.

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  15. Kim @ justByou April 25, 2013 at 12:01 am #

    Reading this definitely leaves me wanting to read more. Plus, I love the illustration. It definitely paints a picture for the mind!
    ~Kim
    http://www.2justByou.com

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 29, 2013 at 12:20 am #

      Hi Kim! I’m so glad you enjoyed the post. I’m sorry my reply took a while. WordPress labeled you as spam for some reason. I appreciate your visit and your comment. I hope you continue to come around. 😀

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  16. Amy Mayen April 25, 2013 at 2:06 pm #

    This excerpt sucked me right in! You are an amazing writer! I’m following on wordpress, so I’ll stay in touch 🙂

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 25, 2013 at 3:00 pm #

      Hello Amy! I’m so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you very much for following and for your kind words. 😀

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  17. Marge Goh April 25, 2013 at 3:53 pm #

    Thanks for sharing the sneek-peek; I’m sure this will be a great story; Wonder whether it’ll be sold in Malaysia. Perhaps I’ll order online.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 25, 2013 at 7:06 pm #

      Hello Marge! You’re very welcome, and thank you for visiting my blog. When The Basement releases it will be available as an ebook and in paperback, and anyone anywhere will be able to order it online. Right now it is available for pre-orders only at the publisher’s bookstore. http://www.tatepublishing.com/bookstore/book.php?w=978-1-62510-555-4
      I want to visit Malaysia. I would love to go shopping in Kuala Lumpur, and take a cruise on the Kinabatangan River in Borneo to see the exotic animals. Some day I will go. 😀

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      • Marge Goh May 2, 2013 at 10:55 am #

        Wish you a nice day Vashti. Thanks for the info; will check the link. Seems you know well about Malaysia…..glad to hear that 🙂

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      • Vashti Quiroz-Vega May 2, 2013 at 4:29 pm #

        You have a great day too Marge. 😀

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    Hi Vashti,
    Thanks for the follow, I am also following your blog now too. Best of luck to you!
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      Hello! I’m so glad you enjoy my posts. I’m posting new information once a week right now because I’m busy working on a new novel. I appreciate the support and I’ll try not to disappoint.

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      Yaaay! I love it! Thank you so much Judy! I’m really excited about this. Haha! 😀

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      Thank you so much Brittni! I’m so happy that you like my blog. I look forward to your visits. 😀

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        Thank you. That’s strange Emily because I don’t even know how to do that. Do you mean you can’t message me on G+? I’ll double check that, but honestly I didn’t even know that function existed. My email address is on my contact page hear also. Thank you for stopping by and i will look into that.

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      Hi Sophie! Thank you very much that means a lot to me. I’ve visited your blog as well. I wish you great success with your work in progress and I’ll be seeing you around. 😀

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 25, 2013 at 5:40 pm #

      Hello Kenneth! Thank you very much. The Basement is a published novel and it’s available in paperback also. It was my pleasure linking up with you guys at the 4 Seasons Blog Hop! Have a great week! 😀

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      Hello Mary! Thank you so much for the kind words and offer. I’m currently working on some rewrites on this book. After all, it was my first book and I’ve learned so much about writing and storytelling since then. It’s a good read but I believe it can be even better. I would love for you to read it when I’m done, if you don’t mind. 🙂

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