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A Time to Mourn and a Time To Dance – Finale

31 Mar

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Happy Monday everyone! I hope you enjoy the 3rd and final installment of A Time to Mourn and a Time to Dance. Be sure to read Part 1 and Part 2 of the series before you read the finale. Your comments are helpful and very appreciated. Thank you!

 

 

 

A Time to Mourn and a Time to Dance

by Vashti Quiroz-Vega

 

“What is the matter?” I asked her.

 

 

“I feel weary, that’s all,” she said, but I knew it was more than that.

 

 

“Are we going for a walk today?”

 

 

“No, I don’t feel up to it.”

 

 

“Have you lost your will to live?” I asked.

 

 

She looked at me sideways and then scowled. “I do not want to walk. I do want to live!”

 

 

Sparks of life flew out of her eyes. I grinned at her. She tried to stay serious, but burst out laughing instead. I sat by her side. She leaned her body toward me and rested her head on my chest. She closed her eyes and fell asleep.

 

 

I was overcome with emotions new to me. How did I get here? Why has this strange girl grown so fond of me? What does she see when she looks at me? Does she not see the blackness in my eyes? Does my long, sable, tangled hair not look suspect? I am large in stature and powerfully built–does this not seem menacing?

 

 

It would be so simple to place my hand over her small nose and mouth while she slept until she could draw breath no more, or break her neck with a quick flick of my wrist. She would never know death had come for her. But she slept the sleep of an infant over my beating heart. Surely death could wait for another moment, one that would be less filled with upright virtue and pure faith. She believed in me, and she saw goodness in me that no one had ever seen. Most people knew me instinctually and tried to flee from me in fright. She welcomed me into her heart. Yes, death could wait.

 

 

She awoke. As she opened her eyes, the day seemed brighter.

 

 

“How long have I been asleep?” she asked.

 

 

“Not very long. Did you sleep well?”

 

 

She smiled widely. “I never slept more soundly.”

 

 

“Now that you’ve had your rest, would you like to go for a walk?”

 

 

She extended her hand toward me, and I reacted. She caressed my face. I closed my eyes to isolate the gentle stroking. No one had ever shown me such kindness. I opened my eyes and saw the most beautiful creature I had ever seen, and she was touching my face in a way that made my heart beat faster.

 

 

“I must leave now. I promised my mother I would not stay out late today.”

 

 

She stood up slowly, and I watched her walk away. She looked over her shoulder once and smiled. That’s when I decided to disable the communication with above. I knew I could not complete this task. Not now–perhaps not ever.

 

 

I returned to the forest several times after that, but she never showed. After a few days, I decided I could not wait any longer. I missed her. So I went to knock on her door. A burly man opened the door, and I got the expected wary look.

 

 

“Yes, who are you looking for, son?” he asked, while looking at me sideways.

 

 

“I’m looking for Abigail.”

 

 

The man’s face turned solemn. “What do you want with her?”

 

 

“She is a friend. I haven’t seen her in a while. I worry for her.”

 

 

“There is reason for worry. She is very sick. The cancer has come back with a vengeance. Her life is only about pain and anguish now.” His voice was hoarse, and wells formed in his eyes. “She was always such a sweet, happy child. She does not deserve to suffer so.” Shaking his head, he turned to go back inside the house.

 

 

“Wait! Where is she?” My pulse raced.

 

 

“Oh, you don’t want to see her like this. It is an awful sight.”

 

 

“I do want to see her. I need to see her. Please tell me where to find her.”

 

 

“She’s at the hospital,” he croaked.

 

 

The hospital was not far. I was there in no time. I watched her briefly from a distance. She squirmed and groaned on the bed. I locked the door and approached her–my heart was breaking. I waited too long. It is because of me she suffers so. I could have spared her this agony. When I reached her bedside, she saw me and smiled despite the anguish she endured.

 

 

“I knew you’d come,” she groaned. She tried to remain still and quiet, but at times she could not, and a moan escaped her lips. I passed my hand over her head and caressed her face. She held my hand with both of hers.

 

 

“Abigail, do you want to live?” My voice quavered.

 

 

She shook her head slowly and whispered, “No.” Streams of sorrow meandered down her face.

 

 

For the first time I expanded my large, black wings and allowed her to see them. “Don’t be frightened,” I said.

 

 

“You never frightened me. I knew all along you were an angel,” she said, wincing and whimpering.

 

 

“I am the angel of death.”

 

 

She gazed lovingly at me. “Give me peace,” she whispered.

 

 

I reached for her and held her in my arms. I leaned my head forward, and she caressed my face. I kissed her on the lips. The sweetest kiss I’ve ever known. And she breathed her last breath.

 

The End

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Copyright © 2014 by Vashti Quiroz-Vega. All rights reserved.

Do you believe that everyone has a designated time to die?  Do you believe in destiny? 

50 Responses to “A Time to Mourn and a Time To Dance – Finale”

  1. davidprosser March 31, 2014 at 11:06 am #

    Beautifully written.
    xxx Huge Hugs xxx

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 31, 2014 at 11:54 am #

      Hello David, thank you very much! I’m so glad you enjoyed the story. My Fantasy Angels Series (WIP) is written in a similar style. Thank you for reading and for the hugs. 😉 xx

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  2. Harliqueen March 31, 2014 at 11:34 am #

    Wow! What a way to end it, was really good 🙂

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 31, 2014 at 11:52 am #

      I’m happy you enjoyed it! My Fantasy Angels Series (WIP) is written in a similar style. 😉

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  3. rcprice March 31, 2014 at 11:38 am #

    I really liked the series, Vashti. Sweet and beautiful.

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  4. Yolanda Isabel Regueira Marin March 31, 2014 at 2:25 pm #

    Sweet and tender …. I wasn’t sure where you were taking that ending but could feel his struggle with himself. Well done Vashti.

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  5. Karen March 31, 2014 at 3:38 pm #

    Vashti, you did it again. This is awesome!

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  6. peternoahthomas March 31, 2014 at 5:37 pm #

    A beautiful ending! The style of writing is wonderful. I will definitely check out your WIP when finished.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 31, 2014 at 8:06 pm #

      That’s awesome Peter! I’m knee deep in final edits right now so your words are very encouraging! Thank you! 😀 xx

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  7. Michelle Stanley March 31, 2014 at 6:23 pm #

    Wonderfully written Vashti, and I love the way the story ended.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 31, 2014 at 8:05 pm #

      I’m happy to hear this Michelle. The ending of a story is very important. I try hard to get it right. 😉

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  8. Kristina & Millie April 1, 2014 at 12:54 pm #

    Totally unexpected! Love it Vashti 🙂

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 1, 2014 at 9:33 pm #

      Hi Kristina or Millie! Thank you very much! I’m so happy you enjoyed it 😀

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  9. sweetyshinde April 1, 2014 at 3:03 pm #

    Aww I could feel the pain of Death Angel. What was that movie where Brad Pitt was Death?
    Nice going Vashti!

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 1, 2014 at 9:35 pm #

      Hi! Thank you! I’m don’t know, but if Brad Pitt is in it I’d love to see it. Let me know when you find out the name I’m curious now. 😉

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  10. Doreen Sargente April 1, 2014 at 4:37 pm #

    Well done Vashti! I wish she didn’t have to die though :(.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 1, 2014 at 9:38 pm #

      Hello Doreen, I know it’s sad. I’ve been thinking a lot about death lately since I have several family members that are very ill. All you can do is wish them a good death, but then you have these fears that creep in. Anyway, thank you!

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  11. GiGi Eats Celebrities April 1, 2014 at 11:45 pm #

    Oh wow. I have no words. That is going to sit with me for awhile. I have a lot of thinking to do. I think we all have OUR TIME. But we are obviously all unaware of when that will be.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 2, 2014 at 12:25 am #

      Hi GiGi! I agree. We all have our time and that’s kind of good to know. I mean why be scared to get on a plane or go skydiving? If it’s not your time to go then nothing will happen to you, right? Hmm. I guess I have some thinking to do too. :/

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  12. JESS44903 April 2, 2014 at 2:08 pm #

    So great! 🙂 Thanks so much for sharing!

    Thanks for joining the Link Up this week!

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  13. Stacey Gannett April 2, 2014 at 3:41 pm #

    Beautiful, Vashti! What a wonderful ending. Thank you so much for linking! Hope you are having a wonderful week, my friend! ❤

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 2, 2014 at 10:21 pm #

      Hello Stacey! Thank you. I’m happy that you enjoyed it. I’m having a good week. I hope you are too! 😀 xx

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  14. Belinda Smith April 3, 2014 at 10:30 am #

    Thank you for leaving a comment on my blog and also for the follow! Now following you back and about to go look around your blog… Bel xx

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 3, 2014 at 10:37 am #

      Hi Bel! Thank you for the visit and follow. I hope you enjoy my blog. Let me know what you think. 🙂

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  15. Angela April 3, 2014 at 11:25 am #

    Loved it. This is my first time visiting I think and glad I did.
    Angela @ Time with A & N

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 3, 2014 at 8:59 pm #

      Hello Angela! Thank you for visiting. I’m glad you enjoyed the story. I hope you’ll be back soon! 😀

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  16. Teagan Kearney April 3, 2014 at 4:20 pm #

    A sad but lovely ending. I guess she had to die…and even the Angel of Death couldn’t prevent it. I really enjoyed the story, Vashti. Developing the story over three episodes works really well. I hope you plan to continue putting these stories up from time to time.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 3, 2014 at 8:53 pm #

      Hello Teagan, thank you. It pleases me that you enjoyed it. I plan on writing many more stories. I love to write and when I get an idea for a story in my head I can’t help but write. Right now though, I’m doing the final edits of the first installment of my Fantasy Angels Series and it’s intense. I can’t wait to be done with it, but at the same time, I would like to do the best job possible. I want the book to be well written and the very best it can be. You know how it is. :/ The editing is consuming most of my time. So the short stories will be few and far between–for now.

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      • Teagan Kearney April 5, 2014 at 2:36 pm #

        What is it they say? Separation makes the heart grow fonder – so your short story audience will be waiting here for when the next idea comes knocking!

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      • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 6, 2014 at 9:41 pm #

        Awww! Thank you Teagan! I hope so! 😉

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      • Teagan Kearney April 5, 2014 at 2:37 pm #

        Oh, and good luck with the editing!

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      • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 6, 2014 at 9:40 pm #

        Thank you Teagan! 😀

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  17. jugglingrealfoodandreallife April 4, 2014 at 3:29 pm #

    Wow! I’m stopping over from Let’s Get Real today. I’ve really enjoyed reading your story. I’m impressed with how quickly you were able to develop such complex characters. I am left feeling equal amounts of love for each of these characters. Not an easy things to do. You are certainly a very talented writer Vashti. Keep the stories coming!

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 6, 2014 at 9:39 pm #

      Hello! Thank you! It is always so nice to hear from a reader that knows about the writing process and the difficulties involved in writing a story such as this. I appreciate your comment so much. Thank you for your kind words and for taking the time to read it. I’m glad you enjoyed it. I will try to keep them coming. 😉

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  18. Sharon Robinson April 4, 2014 at 7:30 pm #

    I could not believe it ended so soon! I loved the entire story! Beautiful!

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 6, 2014 at 9:47 pm #

      Thank you Sharon! I’m so happy you enjoyed the story. You’ll probably enjoy my Fantasy Angels Series, which is written in the same style. And it’s much longer! 😉 Ha,ha! xx

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  19. Betty Taylor April 7, 2014 at 4:56 pm #

    Beautiful! I think you have done a fantastic job with this series! I am going to post this to StumbleUpon. Thanks for sharing this with us at the Four Seasons Blog Hop.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega April 7, 2014 at 6:00 pm #

      Hi Betty! That’s great! Thank you very much! I’m glad you enjoyed the series. 😀

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  20. Gaye @CalmHealthySexy April 8, 2014 at 11:54 am #

    Hi Vashti – Thanks so much for sharing with the Let’s Get Real party.

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  21. Dennis Cardiff April 19, 2014 at 9:34 am #

    Wonderful, I look forward to reading more. ~ Dennis

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  22. Sarah July 14, 2014 at 1:24 am #

    Goosebumps! Glad I found this. Very good story!

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