Fall From Desire – Part 1

30 May


swamp-fallen angel-Vashti Quiroz-Vega

Artist Victoria Frances

Hello! I’m almost done with the editing of my Dark Fantasy novel, The Fall of Lilith. I’m very excited with the way it’s turning out and soon I will post an excerpt from the book. In the meantime, I bring you today Part 1 of my short story Fall From Desire. It is a dark fantasy written in a similar style to The Fall of Lilith, the first installment of my Fantasy Angels Series. I hope you enjoy. 



Fall From Desire

by Vashti Q



For my transgressions, I was cast out of Heaven and exiled to planet Earth.


My fall was brutal as my six large wings caught fire entering the Earth’s atmosphere. I cringed, cried and screamed as the flames consumed feathers and flesh. I looped and spiraled in the air, all the while stirring and reaching toward the flames, but there was no relief from the oppressive pain or the desperate stench of roasted fleshy tissue. The fire was quenched when only the burnt bones of my wings remained. I wailed writhing in the air as the bony frames were yanked from my skeleton by a powerful force. This is what the male angels I led astray with my insatiable carnal appetite experienced as they fell from grace. I deserve worse for corrupting so many.


I splashed into a swamp.


It was night, and the only light source was the brilliance of a full moon.


The swamp was dominated by woody plants and teeming with animal life. The water seemed to push down on me from all sides. I floundered and flailed my arms and legs, but it only made me sink faster. I sank further and further in the swamp and away from the light of the moon. Soon, I was shrouded in darkness. My lungs burned for air. In horror, I screamed and warm, murky water filled my lungs. I shook and convulsed as my eyes caught site of alligators, snakes and all manner of swamp creatures witnessing the water take me away.


My eyes snapped open. I was floating over the water. I survived? I was not sure how long I was unconscious, only that it was a different night—for the moon was no longer full. I trembled in fear and remained still, allowing the current to carry me wherever it may. As I came near the bank of the swamp, I took hold of a cypress’s knee, clambered to my feet and waded out of the water. I teetered and faltered, inexperienced in walking without wings. I am no longer an angel. Realization pierced my heart. What am I now? I broke the rules of celibacy in Heaven and tempted so many to do the same with my female ways. My lustful desires and sexual appetite were my ruin. Now I am alone, never to feel the pleasure of a caress.


My wide eyes flickered in every direction, trying to find a way out of the desolate and wild place. The strong, musky smell of decomposing vegetation and animal matter wafted into my nose, making me grimace with revulsion. There were no such smells in Heaven. Oh, how far I have gone from Heaven’s joyful fragrances!


I staggered in circles, my feet sinking into the spongy, wet ground. The moisture was so dense in this habitat that everything was wet. A film of moisture covered my naked body. Water soaked my long, blonde hair and pulled my curls flat. I heard the hooting of an owl. My eyes lifted to a nearby tree and there it was, lurking in the shadows. Its large glowing eyes stared at me. Snakes slithered around my feet. Alligators peered at me with their strange eyes peeking over the surface of the water while they remained immersed. Where am I? There are only wetlands as far as my eyes can see. How am I to survive here? Do I desire survival? My body trembled, and desperate tears fell and blended with the moisture on my face. No one can hear me cry. I am alone. I continued to walk for miles. There were many sunrises and many moonrises, yet I remained alone in a world of swamps.


Swarms of mosquitos tormented me with their stinging and their buzzing in my ears. I had to deter countless attacks from snakes and alligators. I was covered in welts, bumps, scratches, and bites from such attacks. My body itched, ached, and throbbed mercilessly. I deserve no less for sating my erotic desires without a second thought for the countless archangels, seraphim, and cherubim I debauched with my impious and lustful ways.


I continued to trek the soggy swampland and began to feel an unfamiliar burning sensation in my middle. My strength was depleting, and I became fatigued. I dragged my feet and panted. Feeling faint, I collapsed. I lay on the water-saturated ground and looked up at the heavens. What is happening to me? What have I become? I lay frozen for hours, feeling so alone, waving off a plethora of insects trying to invade my body. I would rather draw my last breath than spend the rest of my days alone in this sodden nightmare.


“What are you?” I heard a masculine voice ask. I jolted upright in a seated position.  I stared at a magnificent creature.


“I-I do not know what I am. I have only knowledge of what I used to be.”


“Very well, then what were you?” he asked with a curious look on his face.


“I was once called Rachiel,” I said. “When I was an angel in Heaven.”


He looked at me sideways and narrowed his eyes. “You do not look like an angel to me.”


“Have you ever seen an angel?”


“Yes, as a matter of fact, I have, and angels have wings.”


I, too, had wings. Large white wings—six of them,” I said, my voice quavering. “They were torn from me as I fell through the skies.”


He scrutinized me for a while with his piercing violet-blue eyes.


“I believe you. I am not sure why, but I do. Perhaps it is that something in your verdant eyes that tells me you do not know how to lie,” he said, and his big smile was stunning. “My name is Mendrion.” He was tall with a muscular build. His hair was long, thick and the color of night. Long, heavy eyelashes framed his violet-blue eyes. His skin was like an ivory mist. He looked like divine pleasure. Enough, Rachiel! This is why you were cast out of Heaven! I shuddered and got out of my own head.


Artist Victoria Frances

Artist Victoria Frances


Copyright © 2014 by Vashti Quiroz-Vega. All rights reserved.

Check out PART 2 of Fall From Desire

31 Responses to “Fall From Desire – Part 1”

  1. writerashwin89 May 31, 2014 at 2:47 am #

    Interesting read!! I liked the way you narrated!


    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega May 31, 2014 at 11:01 am #

      Hi Ashwin! Thank you. I’m using an archaic language similar to the one I use for my novel Lilith. I’m glad you liked it! 🙂


  2. Alana Munro - The Author Who Supports May 31, 2014 at 7:04 am #

    Nice work, thanks for sharing. 🙂


    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega May 31, 2014 at 10:59 am #

      Thank you Alana! I know you’re super busy so thank you for taking the time to read it. I hope all is well. 😀


  3. peternoahthomas May 31, 2014 at 7:17 am #

    Another fantastic read and looking forward to the rest!


    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega May 31, 2014 at 10:58 am #

      Hello Peter! That’s so cool! Thank you for reading. I’m glad you enjoyed it. Part 2 will be posted on Tuesday. 😀


  4. Rat May 31, 2014 at 10:42 am #

    superb narration. nice flow.. looking forward to read the rest 🙂


  5. Yolanda Isabel Regueira Marin June 1, 2014 at 4:37 am #

    A great introduction Vashti. Good background to how she winds up where she is and and insight into her character. 🙂


  6. Michelle Stanley June 1, 2014 at 10:31 pm #

    HI Vashti. Part 1 is interesting and I like the development of the story. Nice image too. Can’t wait to read more.


    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega June 2, 2014 at 12:05 am #

      Hello Michelle! Thank you. I’m so happy you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading. 🙂


  7. Lisa Nelson June 10, 2014 at 7:39 am #

    This is terrific Vashti! Really well done. Lustful desires will get you kicked out of heaven every single time. What are you gonna do though?

    As I was reading, I could feel what she felt. Very well done with the narration. I love it!

    Thanks so much for sharing!


    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega June 11, 2014 at 10:06 am #

      Hi Lisa! It’s so nice to hear from you! Ha,ha! Yes, lustful desires will definitely get you kicked out of Heaven! I’m so happy you enjoyed Part 1. I hope Part 2 is just as enjoyable for you. Thank you for taking the time to read my story. 😀


  8. Brittnei Washington June 10, 2014 at 2:36 pm #

    Wow Vashti, you have such great writing. I love the detail in your artwork as well. Thank you so much for sharing this with us at the Creative Style Linkup!


    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega June 11, 2014 at 10:08 am #

      Thank you Brittnei! The illustrations are magnificent and was in part what inspired the story. It is always a pleasure when I can link up with you guys! Have a great day! 😀


  9. Rebecca June 14, 2014 at 11:36 pm #

    Great story. I tweeted “Lilith” and found you. After having my first dreams of her (in 2000)to this day, I’ve been thinking off and on about her. When I was converting from Catholicism to Lutheranism, I had dreams about Lilith, fallen angels, nephilims, rituals where I was speaking Latin. It scared the bejesus out of my pastor. Would love to read your book. Where can I find it? Maybe you can make sense of it all for me. Who knows


    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega June 16, 2014 at 10:31 am #

      Hello Rebecca,

      Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed the story. First, I wanted to make it very clear that Lilith is a fictional character in the 1st installment of my Fantasy Angels Series. This is a dark fantasy series and not religious in any aspect. There will be no answers for you in this book––only entertainment. The book has not released yet. I’m in the final edits now. I’m hoping to release it early next year. 🙂


  10. Terri Henkels June 17, 2014 at 7:42 am #

    Love it! Draws you in right away and your descriptions are excellent. Can’t wait to read part II.


    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega June 17, 2014 at 6:36 pm #

      Hi Terri! I’m so happy to hear from you. Thank you for reading. I’m glad you enjoyed the story. Part 2 is already posted btw. 😉


  11. alexandrastarbuck November 13, 2014 at 1:00 pm #

    I love stories about angels, especially fallen ones! My favorite TV show is Supernatural, as I’m sure you can tell by my Twitter posts. 🙂


    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 13, 2014 at 8:10 pm #

      Hi Alexandra! Yes, I did figure out you enjoy stories about angels. I’m glad you’re enjoying this one so far. The book I’m editing now is also about angels (fallen angels and regular angels). It’s an epic fantasy with dark elements called The Fall of Lilith.

      Liked by 1 person

      • alexandrastarbuck January 1, 2015 at 1:12 pm #

        Hey, when does The Fall of Lilith come out? I really like dark fantasy. It sounds intriguing.


      • Vashti Quiroz-Vega January 2, 2015 at 1:00 pm #

        Hi Alexandra! I’m hoping to get it out in the next few months. Thank you! 😀 xx

        Liked by 1 person

  12. alexandrastarbuck January 15, 2015 at 1:08 pm #

    You’re welcome! And I’ll be watching for it! 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  13. Vashti Quiroz-Vega June 19, 2014 at 12:07 pm #

    Thank you Kenneth! 😀



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