Online Dating – Haiku

13 Nov

Okay, so this is my first attempt at writing a (or is it an) Haiku poem. First of all, some of you may be asking yourselves, what is a haiku? I will tell you. A haiku is a japanese poetry form. Don’t worry, I’m going to write it in english. A haiku uses just a few words to capture a moment and create a picture in the reader’s mind.

Traditionally, haiku is written in three lines, with five syllables in the first line, seven syllables in the second line, and five syllables in the third line.

I write horror, among other genres, so hopefully my haiku will create a horrifying picture in your mind. Just kidding––or am I?

 

Here it is. My first haiku. I’m so nervous . . .

 

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Online Dating

by Vashti Quiroz-Vega

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Smile on a website

Is that a head in your fridge?

There’s no second date

 

Well? What did you think? Let me know your thoughts in the comment section. Thank you!

28 Responses to “Online Dating – Haiku”

  1. Yolanda Isabel Regueira Marin November 13, 2014 at 1:07 am #

    Fabulous, a standing ovation xx

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 13, 2014 at 4:42 pm #

      Ha, ha! Thank you, thank you. *Takes a bow* I know I need to get the hang of it. Maybe I’ll do one of these once a week. It’ll be good practice. 😉

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  2. Hugh's Views and News November 13, 2014 at 6:26 am #

    Well done. I know it’s a haiku with a touch of horror in it, but it made me chuckle as well 🙂

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 13, 2014 at 4:55 pm #

      It was the head in the fridge, wasn’t it? Ha, ha! Geez! I was trying to be scary. :/

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      • Hugh's Views and News November 14, 2014 at 3:26 am #

        I admire the way you have put horror and a haiku together, Vashti. I’d never have thought of doing that so for well done for being original. Most the haikus I read (and write) are about love, sadness or happiness.

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      • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 14, 2014 at 4:41 pm #

        Hello Hugh. Thank you very much. I read in a site about haiku that there really weren’t any rules except for the structure of the poem. So I figured why not infuse a little horror into it. I’ll try to write one in the more traditional style next time. 😉

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  3. Gelly Ntilia November 13, 2014 at 6:26 am #

    It seems a little bit superficial.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 13, 2014 at 8:04 pm #

      How so, Gelly? Please explain. I want to learn. 🙂

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    • Gelly Ntilia November 14, 2014 at 3:33 am #

      A haiku is not like an anekdote to laugh with but food for thought. If you take it seriously, you may find satisfaction and then the others will be pleased,too.

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      • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 14, 2014 at 4:47 pm #

        Hi Gelly, believe it or not I did not intend to write a funny haiku, it just turned out that way. My understanding is that there are no strict rules to writing a haiku, except for the structure and number of syllables. However, I do see what you mean. Haiku is traditionally written about nature and the seasons. I will keep that in mind next time. 🙂

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  4. robert okaji November 13, 2014 at 6:31 am #

    It made me chuckle. Good work!

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  5. olganm November 13, 2014 at 1:38 pm #

    I´m with Hugh. Laughing here. 🙂

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  6. wccunningham November 14, 2014 at 12:39 pm #

    Very Dahmer-ish… 🙂

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  7. Zee November 14, 2014 at 2:39 pm #

    Hahaha! Great way to start the morning – comedic horror!

    It’s particularly real as I know I few friends that been through the grueling process of online dating. It worked out well for them in the end, but it takes a lot to weed out the dodgy ones.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 14, 2014 at 4:50 pm #

      Hi Zee! Yes, I’ve had friends and relatives who have tried online dating and although some have worked out well. I have heard some nightmare stories. :/

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  8. doreen@househoneys November 16, 2014 at 8:36 pm #

    You had me at ‘head in the fridge’ lol

    And here I thought Haiku was an entree 😳

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 17, 2014 at 11:30 am #

      Ha,ha! It does sound like an entree, doesn’t it. Haiku––not the ‘head in the fridge’. 😉 I’m glad you enjoyed it.

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  9. Lorraine Marie Reguly November 18, 2014 at 3:59 am #

    Reblogged this on POETRY PERFECTED and commented:
    I had to add this one; I love her first attempt. Hilarious and TRUE. LOL

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  10. JESS44903 November 18, 2014 at 10:47 pm #

    Haha, I love it!

    Thanks for joining the Link Up this week!

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  11. Keisha || The Girl Next Door is Black November 21, 2014 at 12:27 pm #

    Awesome! It cracked me up (which I hope is an okay response). Nice job!

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  12. Euphonos December 23, 2014 at 8:28 pm #

    Well written 🙂 I have never tried writing Haiku and you seem to be getting your hands on too well.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega December 26, 2014 at 12:11 pm #

      Hi! Thank you! Give it a try! I was really intimidated by haiku before but writing them turned out to be a lot of fun. 😀 xx

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