Autumn Fruit – Haiku

16 Nov

So this is my second attempt at writing a Haiku poem. You tell me if I did better this time.

 

01_AUTUMN FRUIT_RED APPLE

Autumn Fruit

by Vashti Quiroz-Vega

Crisp, juicy apple

Scrumptious to eat

In paradise a lover’s kiss

 

Young lovers eating an apple

Love to hear from you. 

36 Responses to “Autumn Fruit – Haiku”

  1. davidprosser November 16, 2014 at 12:56 pm #

    I’m not a fan of this form of poetry Vashti but that was delightful.
    xxx Huge Hugs xxx

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  2. cindy knoke November 16, 2014 at 1:22 pm #

    Perfection! ❤

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  3. Yolanda Isabel Regueira Marin November 16, 2014 at 1:59 pm #

    Top marks Vashti xx

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  4. Leslie November 16, 2014 at 1:59 pm #

    I love apples, hah. I think you did a great job. I didn’t see the first attempt but I’m sure that one was good too.

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  5. Zee November 16, 2014 at 2:41 pm #

    Reminiscent of Adam and Eve… purposeful?

    Haiku is a fascinating form of poetry. The tight structure means everything else is free.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 17, 2014 at 11:20 am #

      Zee, you got it, girl! Again, another subtle hint at my fantasy angels series. Shameless––I know. :/ I’m really loving it. I’m having a lot of fun with it. 😀

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      • Zee November 17, 2014 at 2:20 pm #

        I blame a Catholic education lol. So when is the fantasy series going to be released? Next year?

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      • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 17, 2014 at 2:27 pm #

        Ha,ha! Same here. I’m hoping to release the 1st installment of my Fantasy Angels Series, The Fall of Lilith, early next year. We’ll see, my fingers are crossed. 😉

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      • Zee November 17, 2014 at 2:27 pm #

        Ooh that is pretty soon. Awesome! I can’t wait to get my hands on it.

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      • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 18, 2014 at 1:31 pm #

        Aw! That would be so cool. 😀 xx

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  6. olganm November 16, 2014 at 3:06 pm #

    Very good. As you know I enjoyed the other one too…:)

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 17, 2014 at 11:19 am #

      Thank you Olga. I know you did. I enjoyed writing the other one more, not that I didn’t enjoy this one. I guess I had fun adding the horror element. 🙂

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  7. mihrank November 16, 2014 at 3:11 pm #

    “She looked like autumn, when leaves turned and fruit ripened.”

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  8. john flanagan November 16, 2014 at 8:24 pm #

    Love the theme and the word choices..please don’t take offence but the usual, traditional haiku form is 5/7/5 but nowadays several writers don’t keep to that so no worries
    My best to you
    john

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 17, 2014 at 11:17 am #

      No offense taken, John. I’m glad you enjoyed it. I’m going to try to stick to the structure more strictly since it’s really the only rule of writing a haiku. 🙂

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  9. Hugh's Views and News November 17, 2014 at 6:43 am #

    Mouthwatering stuff, Vashti. I like this one very much, but I’d liked the other one you wrote as well, even though they are on opposite sides of the scale.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 17, 2014 at 11:15 am #

      Hi Hugh! Thank you. To be honest I enjoyed writing my horror infused one best but this one was kind of fun too. Ha,ha. I love apples. 😉

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  10. Bekki@a better way to homeschool November 18, 2014 at 1:01 am #

    My kids are supposed to write a haiku tomorrow and I was lacking inspiration… Thank you!

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 18, 2014 at 1:30 pm #

      Aw. I’m so glad Bekki. Pictures are also great for haiku inspiration. Especially landscapes. Haiku writing will get their creative juices flowing. Great idea. You just inspired me! I have to do an activity with a 5th grade class that’s reading my book, The Basement. I think we’re going to write haiku. 😀 Thank you!

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  11. Lorraine Marie Reguly November 18, 2014 at 3:58 am #

    Reblogged this on POETRY PERFECTED and commented:
    As someone who wrote tons of Haiku poems last April, I have to say, this one is great. I just wish I could take the credit! LOL

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 18, 2014 at 1:24 pm #

      Hi Lorraine! Wow! That’s awesome coming from you. I’m going to have to check out those haiku you wrote. Thank you! 😀

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  12. Topaz November 18, 2014 at 10:10 am #

    Oh, the last line is gorgeous! I love the direction in which you took this poem – and I must say I wish I could write haiku. Although I’m a poet myself, haiku is the one form I can’t quite seem to get right. You did it beautifully – I’m jealous! 😉

    Right, now off to eat an apple… you’ve made me hungry…

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 18, 2014 at 1:05 pm #

      Hello! Thank you so much and enjoy that apple. Ha,ha! 😉 For a long time I was intimidated by this style of poetry because you have to create a picture and a story with three little lines. But now that I’ve tried it I can’t stop. I’ve always enjoyed reading them and now I love writing them. You should definitely try. Don’t be jealous, I still need much improvement, but I won’t stop trying. 😀

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      • Topaz November 19, 2014 at 12:26 am #

        What a wonderful story – I’m so glad you’ve learned to love haiku. 😀

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      • Vashti Quiroz-Vega November 19, 2014 at 11:08 am #

        Thank you. I really do love it. Actually, I’ve always enjoyed reading haiku. I have a few friends that are really good writing them. I was always intimidated about writing them though. I’m glad I’m over it. 😉

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  13. Jet Eliot November 18, 2014 at 8:02 pm #

    A lovely haiku and painting. 🙂

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  14. JESS44903 November 18, 2014 at 10:48 pm #

    Very nice!

    Thanks for joining the Link Up this week!

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  15. ratnibbles December 3, 2014 at 12:51 pm #

    Wow.. that’s very sweet 🙂

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