Haiku Friday – Milk & Smooth

19 Feb

Haiku Friday-The Writer Next Door

Hi everyone! Happy Friday! Today’s prompt words are Milk and Smooth. They were provided by Ronovan Hester of Ronovan Writes.

Ronovan hosts a challenge that anyone could participate in called Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Prompt Challenge every Monday, and you have until Sunday to create a post featuring your haiku poem. He is a writer and poet and also does author interviews and much more on his blog. Be sure to check it out. Read Ron’s Haiku Prompt Challenge Guidelines for more information.

Paradise Lost

by Vashti Quiroz-Vega

Eyes bright diamonds

Flesh smooth and white fresh cream

Original sin

Milky arms reach out

Rhapsodic sapphire eyes gaze

At smooth dulcet fruit

Paradise Lost

Have a great weekend!

36 Responses to “Haiku Friday – Milk & Smooth”

  1. Al The Author February 19, 2016 at 1:20 pm #

    Simply sumptuous!

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  2. Greg February 19, 2016 at 2:54 pm #

    Two more lovely, vivid haiku! Have a blessed weekend, Vashti 🙂

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  3. The New Bullying Prevention February 19, 2016 at 2:59 pm #

    Happy weekend Madame 🙂

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  4. 10000hoursleft February 19, 2016 at 3:26 pm #

    Great haiku vashti! Even with diamond /sapphire eyes, she was left wanting…that was never going to end well!

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  5. Judy Martin February 19, 2016 at 3:36 pm #

    These are great Vashti, so descriptive. The first one is my favourite though 🙂

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  6. the secret keeper February 19, 2016 at 3:55 pm #

    The lusciousness of the smooth flesh tempting. The eyes fixated on the fruit filled with an unknown sweetness beckoning her will to break. Give in – she’s knows she wants to break the words against her actions. Paradise Lost – for sure the title fitting perfectly the situation.

    Perfectly written words in your Haiku. So descriptive. Why, though, she can’t resist, should such a huge deal be made from her broken will? So we discover knowledge. It feels so rigged by a tyrannical government. One mistake and you’re tossed out of the sweetest home. Not fair.

    Well done. 🙂

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega February 19, 2016 at 4:27 pm #

      Thank you! You know, you almost took on the personality of my character ‘Lilith’ in that second paragraph. A lot of her sentiments are in there. I love your interpretations of my haiku. They are always right on. 😉 ❤

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  7. olganm February 20, 2016 at 3:00 am #

    Gorgeous use of the words. I’ve been thinking a fair bit about Milton’s Paradise Lost…

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega February 21, 2016 at 1:56 pm #

      Hmm. Me too. Great minds . . . Ha,ha! Thank you! I hope you’re enjoying yourself. 😀 xx

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  8. Frank February 20, 2016 at 6:59 pm #

    The combination of rhapsody and sapphire eyes startled me, also the indirect connection with Lilith. In my first novel, Kings of Infinite Space, there is a character called the Dancer whose name Bas’Lillene derived from Bast, Lilith and Helen. Here is one description of her:

    It was a song without words, a melancholy melody that arrested him, devoured him. It brought tears to his dragon-eyes, tears which damped the raging fire in his heart. Merian completely forgotten, Witternig drifted across the vale to find the voice that filled him with such longing. He had never needed anything as much as he needed to find the source of that song. He had not known that such beauty was possible.

    He found her, even as her song ended. She stood between Aslin, whose left arm was bandaged, and Ghenya, whose soot-blackened face was streaked with tears. She was a short woman with short black hair and blue eyes that matched the sapphires she wore at her ears. Her metallic trousers shimmered and her orange silk tunic seemed impossibly to catch the sunlight.

    Without knowing how, he knew her. ‘Dancer,’ he greeted her.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega February 21, 2016 at 2:06 pm #

      Lovely excerpt. I could see why you were taken aback. Your Bas’Lillene and my Lilith should definitely meet. 😉

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  9. Denis1950 February 20, 2016 at 9:07 pm #

    Very deep haiku Vashti, before scrolling to the book cover I imagined someone stepping back from breaking a strict diet!!!!! you can certainly turn your back on a tub of ice cream for an apple if it counts. Sorry!!

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega February 21, 2016 at 1:59 pm #

      Ha, ha! Denis, you have an amazing imagination! I can see some people being that passionate about food. 😉 No need to be sorry.

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  10. Ronovan February 20, 2016 at 11:55 pm #

    Knowing your mind, very nice use of the words and then some. Tantalizing, teasing, and terrific.

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  11. dgkaye February 21, 2016 at 12:09 pm #

    Yummy words. Happy weekend Vashti. 🙂

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  12. Olga February 21, 2016 at 1:28 pm #

    Hi Vashti. Very smooth, poetic words wrapping their arms around the image that symbolizes loss of innocence. Wonderful post.

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  13. aranislandgirl February 21, 2016 at 6:40 pm #

    Love your inspiration, and the resulting haikus.

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  14. Janni Styles February 23, 2016 at 9:36 pm #

    Two haikus and both very thought provoking but the first one really stopped me in my tracks, thank you for the great read 🙂 ❤

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega February 24, 2016 at 11:06 am #

      Hi Janni! ‘Thought provoking’ is great! I’m always happy when one of my haiku can be food for thought. Thank you for reading. ❤ xx

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  15. Mrs. AOK February 25, 2016 at 1:10 pm #

    Lovely! I just love how you own words. It seems flawless. I think there would be a mountain of wadded up paper balls with words that just wont connect for me. Wonderful work, Vashti.
    XOXO

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega February 25, 2016 at 2:32 pm #

      Aww. You would be surprised what you can do when you sit down and try. I’ve always loved haiku poetry but I was very intimidated by it. I couldn’t imagine saying so much with such few words. One day, I decided to try it and I’ve been hooked ever since. I was terrible at first, but little by little I’ve improved and can still improve more. Thank you for the sweet comment. I appreciate you. 😀 ❤ xx

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  16. JESS44903 February 27, 2016 at 4:24 pm #

    Loved this Haiku! 🙂

    Thanks for joining Cooking and Crafting with J & J!

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