Hi everyone! Happy Friday! Today’s prompt words are Milk and Smooth. They were provided by Ronovan Hester of Ronovan Writes.
Ronovan hosts a challenge that anyone could participate in called Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Prompt Challenge every Monday, and you have until Sunday to create a post featuring your haiku poem. He is a writer and poet and also does author interviews and much more on his blog. Be sure to check it out. Read Ron’s Haiku Prompt Challenge Guidelines for more information.
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Paradise Lost
by Vashti Quiroz-Vega
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Eyes bright diamonds
Flesh smooth and white fresh cream
Original sin
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Milky arms reach out
Rhapsodic sapphire eyes gaze
At smooth dulcet fruit
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The Writer Next Door | Vashti Q 
Simply sumptuous!
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I like the sound of that. Thank you! 🙂
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Two more lovely, vivid haiku! Have a blessed weekend, Vashti 🙂
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Thank you Greg! 😀
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Happy weekend Madame 🙂
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Thank you Terry! Have fun! 😀 xx
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Great haiku vashti! Even with diamond /sapphire eyes, she was left wanting…that was never going to end well!
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That’s right! She craved knowledge and she got it. No more bliss.
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No turning back…
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These are great Vashti, so descriptive. The first one is my favourite though 🙂
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Hi Judy! Thank you! I’m glad I was able to depict an image in your mind. That’s what it’s all about. 😉 xx
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Absolutely! 🙂
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The lusciousness of the smooth flesh tempting. The eyes fixated on the fruit filled with an unknown sweetness beckoning her will to break. Give in – she’s knows she wants to break the words against her actions. Paradise Lost – for sure the title fitting perfectly the situation.
Perfectly written words in your Haiku. So descriptive. Why, though, she can’t resist, should such a huge deal be made from her broken will? So we discover knowledge. It feels so rigged by a tyrannical government. One mistake and you’re tossed out of the sweetest home. Not fair.
Well done. 🙂
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Thank you! You know, you almost took on the personality of my character ‘Lilith’ in that second paragraph. A lot of her sentiments are in there. I love your interpretations of my haiku. They are always right on. 😉 ❤
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Gorgeous use of the words. I’ve been thinking a fair bit about Milton’s Paradise Lost…
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Hmm. Me too. Great minds . . . Ha,ha! Thank you! I hope you’re enjoying yourself. 😀 xx
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The combination of rhapsody and sapphire eyes startled me, also the indirect connection with Lilith. In my first novel, Kings of Infinite Space, there is a character called the Dancer whose name Bas’Lillene derived from Bast, Lilith and Helen. Here is one description of her:
It was a song without words, a melancholy melody that arrested him, devoured him. It brought tears to his dragon-eyes, tears which damped the raging fire in his heart. Merian completely forgotten, Witternig drifted across the vale to find the voice that filled him with such longing. He had never needed anything as much as he needed to find the source of that song. He had not known that such beauty was possible.
He found her, even as her song ended. She stood between Aslin, whose left arm was bandaged, and Ghenya, whose soot-blackened face was streaked with tears. She was a short woman with short black hair and blue eyes that matched the sapphires she wore at her ears. Her metallic trousers shimmered and her orange silk tunic seemed impossibly to catch the sunlight.
Without knowing how, he knew her. ‘Dancer,’ he greeted her.
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Lovely excerpt. I could see why you were taken aback. Your Bas’Lillene and my Lilith should definitely meet. 😉
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Very deep haiku Vashti, before scrolling to the book cover I imagined someone stepping back from breaking a strict diet!!!!! you can certainly turn your back on a tub of ice cream for an apple if it counts. Sorry!!
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Ha, ha! Denis, you have an amazing imagination! I can see some people being that passionate about food. 😉 No need to be sorry.
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Knowing your mind, very nice use of the words and then some. Tantalizing, teasing, and terrific.
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Thank you Ron! I love it that you know my mind! 🙂
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Yummy words. Happy weekend Vashti. 🙂
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Thank you Debby! I’m happy you enjoyed. 🙂
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🙂
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Hi Vashti. Very smooth, poetic words wrapping their arms around the image that symbolizes loss of innocence. Wonderful post.
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Thank you Olga! I enjoy using some of my favorite words whenever I get the chance. 😀 xx
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Love your inspiration, and the resulting haikus.
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Thank you Melissa. It’s a great book. 🙂
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Two haikus and both very thought provoking but the first one really stopped me in my tracks, thank you for the great read 🙂 ❤
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Hi Janni! ‘Thought provoking’ is great! I’m always happy when one of my haiku can be food for thought. Thank you for reading. ❤ xx
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Lovely! I just love how you own words. It seems flawless. I think there would be a mountain of wadded up paper balls with words that just wont connect for me. Wonderful work, Vashti.
XOXO
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Aww. You would be surprised what you can do when you sit down and try. I’ve always loved haiku poetry but I was very intimidated by it. I couldn’t imagine saying so much with such few words. One day, I decided to try it and I’ve been hooked ever since. I was terrible at first, but little by little I’ve improved and can still improve more. Thank you for the sweet comment. I appreciate you. 😀 ❤ xx
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Loved this Haiku! 🙂
Thanks for joining Cooking and Crafting with J & J!
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Aw. I’m so glad. Thank you! 😀 xx
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