Haiku Friday – Lightning & Rain

13 May

Hello! It is Haiku Friday and today’s prompt words are Lightning and Rain. They were provided by Ronovan Hester of Ronovan Writes.

Ronovan hosts a challenge that anyone could participate in called Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Prompt Challenge every Monday, and you have until Sunday to create a post featuring your haiku poem. He is an author and poet and also does author interviews and much more on his blog. Be sure to check it out. Read Ron’s Haiku Prompt Challenge Guidelines for more information.


**This is my first time writing a Tanka which is a Japanese poem very much like a Haiku except it has two extra lines at the end both with seven syllables. (5-7-5-7-7)


She stood in the mist

Waiting on the same corner

For the lightning train

To carry her past the stars

Where her beloved awaits


Happy Friday the 13th! 😮

45 Responses to “Haiku Friday – Lightning & Rain”

  1. stacilys May 13, 2016 at 1:17 pm #

    Great Tanka Vashti. And that’s such a cool picture too.
    Have a great weekend, my friend.
    🙂 ❤

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega May 13, 2016 at 2:37 pm #

      Hi Staci! Thank you! That means a lot coming from the queen of poetry. The picture is a bit dark but it goes with the fact that it’s Friday the 13th. 😉 You have a wonderful weekend too! ❤ xx

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      • stacilys May 16, 2016 at 2:06 pm #

        Ahhhhh hahahaha. I love it @the queen of poetry. You’re too sweet Vashti.
        The picture was perfect for the poem, and of course, the day.
        Hope you had a great weekend, and please have a wonderful week.
        🙂 ❤

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  2. olganm May 13, 2016 at 1:44 pm #

    Gorgeous, Vashti. Have a great weekend!

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega May 13, 2016 at 2:38 pm #

      Thank you Olga! Have a great weekend too. Take a break and have some fun! 😀 xx


  3. Annette Rochelle Aben May 13, 2016 at 2:10 pm #

    Ooh, this could work itself into an entire story or book. Well done!

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  4. Al Lane May 13, 2016 at 2:44 pm #

    A fitting tanka for the date… Love it! 🙂

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  5. Greg May 13, 2016 at 2:44 pm #

    Just lovely! Although I’ve not written one in a while, tanka is probably my favorite form of poetry.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega May 13, 2016 at 2:49 pm #

      Hi Greg! It was fun and you could say so much more with the two extra lines. Enjoy your day and weekend! 🙂

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      • Greg May 13, 2016 at 3:46 pm #

        I agree 100% about the two extra lines!

        Have a blessed weekend 🙂

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  6. vronlacroix May 13, 2016 at 3:25 pm #

    A perfect and beautiful tanka.

    Liked by 1 person

  7. Ritu May 13, 2016 at 3:30 pm #

    Love the Tanka Vashti!!!

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  8. Frank May 13, 2016 at 3:49 pm #

    Nice! Makes me want to follow her. I’m still trying to get my head around the rules of tanka.

    two years since lightning
    cleaved the burned and blackened sky
    and past from future
    rain never falls in the park
    where the swingless chains still dance

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  9. Srivi May 13, 2016 at 5:40 pm #

    Oooo… Spooky tanka for an equally spooky date and picture!!!!
    Brilliant… Loved it 😀 ❤

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  10. Denis1950 May 13, 2016 at 10:19 pm #

    The image does your tanka justice. These tankas are quite challenging and you hold the form really well.

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega May 14, 2016 at 11:51 am #

      Hi Denis! Happy Saturday! Thank you very much. That’s good to know. I wanted to give the tanka an eerie, ghostly feel, so when I found the image I thought it would go perfectly. Thanks for confirming that. Have a great day! 🙂 xx


  11. Sunni Morris May 13, 2016 at 10:46 pm #

    I like this one and good for Fri the 13th.

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  12. nagrij May 14, 2016 at 10:48 am #

    Nice. I like the format.

    Liked by 1 person

  13. Alice May 15, 2016 at 11:15 am #

    Beautiful, heartbreaking, bitter sweet … well done, Vashti to making me feel so many emotions.

    Liked by 1 person

  14. willowdot21 May 17, 2016 at 12:34 pm #

    OH! this is gorgeous really awakes my imagination !


  15. JESS44903 May 17, 2016 at 1:29 pm #

    Aww…so great!

    Thanks for joining Cooking and Crafting with J & J!

    Liked by 1 person

  16. Teagan Geneviene May 17, 2016 at 2:40 pm #

    That is lovely, Vashti! So much of a story in so few words. Very well done! Hugs.


  17. Mrs. AOK May 22, 2016 at 1:07 pm #

    I just realized my comment didn’t stick 😦
    Anyway, I’m quite sure I was gushing over your work, how I think it’s amazing how you are able to paint a story with such little words each week.

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega May 30, 2016 at 8:42 pm #

      Don’t you just hate when that happens? I so appreciate your inspiring comments each week. I’m so happy you enjoy my posts. ❤ xx


  18. Elemental Quill August 5, 2016 at 10:59 am #

    I’ve never heard of tankas before but this sounds like an interesting thing to look further into. In a few words, it feels like there’s deep meaning to it. Great stuff!


    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega August 5, 2016 at 12:02 pm #

      Thank you. A Tanka is like a haiku with two more lines added. The added lines must add up to 7 syllables each. They are a lot of fun to write. Look into it. I’m sure you’ll have fun with it. 😀


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