Haiku Friday – Eye & Fade

17 Feb

Hello and a warm welcome to my blog! It’s Haiku Friday and I hope you’re having a good one.

Eye and Fade are this week’s prompt words chosen by Ronovan Hester of Ronovan Writes.

Ron hosts a challenge that anyone could participate in called Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Prompt Challenge every Monday, and you have until Sunday to create a post featuring your haiku poem. He is an author and poet and also does author interviews and much more on his blog. Be sure to check it out. Read Ron’s Haiku Prompt Challenge Guidelines for more information.

**I will share a short story (flash-fiction) along with my poem this week. I hope you enjoy it.

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Illustration by Abbey Watkins

D. I. D.

What’s my point-of-view?

I hear so many voices

I don’t know what to do.


Should I take my pills and fade?

Or sharpen my clip point blade?

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I stare into the mirror but it isn’t me I see. Those black eyes staring back at me are not my own. Someone lives inside me and his one desire is to control me.

What to do with a mind you cannot control? A mind that thinks in ways you wish it didn’t and behaves in ways that isn’t you. Every day my body feels less and less my own. I’m fading away like a mist in the wind while this stranger takes over my entire being.

I live in his eyes as a mere spectator to the actions of my body. He comes and goes as he pleases while I’m imprisoned in the shadows of my mind. My desire to break free is great. I wish to burst through his gentle eyes and tear his world apart.

I want to destroy smiles––erase them from every face I see and turn them into horrified grimaces. I want to break hearts and ruin minds. I want to turn laughter into wails of agony.

However, every morning, as sure as the sun rises he takes his medicine and with this simple act I am trapped in the gloom of a foggy night––a prisoner in my own mind.

He peers into the mirror and smiles knowing that I am trapped behind his eyes. But as long as they serve as windows through which I can see the world––I will not fade. I only need wait . . . One day he will forget to take his pill.

Enjoy your weekend!






44 Responses to “Haiku Friday – Eye & Fade”

  1. coldhandboyack at 12:54 pm #

    Great story.

    Liked by 1 person

  2. Annette Rochelle Aben at 12:58 pm #

    I can feel the emotion and when I got to the end, I went back and read it again. Thrice! ❤

    Liked by 1 person

  3. olganm at 1:28 pm #

    Great story. Atmospheric and psychologically fascinating. Interesting to tell the story from the other point of view.

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega at 1:41 pm #

      Wow, that means a lot coming from you, Olga! I’m happy that as a psychiatrist you were able to enjoy it. I’m fascinated with how the mind works. Thank you. ❤ xx


  4. Frank at 2:16 pm #

    Love the story…

    Liked by 1 person

  5. Melissa Gillan at 3:03 pm #

    I too reread your story a few times and can imagine this person living in a daily hell but really admire the thread of hope he clings to. Your short story has me thinking much. Does the tale continue?

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega at 10:55 am #

      Hello Melissa! The story is about a man suffering from ‘Dissociate Identity Disorder’ and it’s written in the point of view of the psychotic personality within him that wants to come out. The man keeps the evil at bay by taking his medication daily but if he stops taking his pills . . . bad things will happen. I’m not sure if the story will continue. We’ll see. 😉 xx


      • Melissa Gillan at 1:09 pm #

        I reread again and completely see the (very interesting) angle you wrote from. Just brilliant! Thanks for the explanation. Hope you’re having a fine weekend. 🙂

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      • Vashti Quiroz-Vega at 4:06 pm #

        Thanks for rereading the story, Melissa. In a way, it’s meant to turn you around a bit. 🙂

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      • Melissa Gillan at 6:56 pm #

        Well done so! 😉

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  6. nagrij at 3:48 pm #

    Very nice, interesting imagery there.

    Liked by 1 person

  7. Sunni Morris at 12:30 am #

    Great story, Vashti.

    Liked by 1 person

  8. tracikenworth at 2:14 pm #

    Like this! Sometimes dealing with bipolar is like this.

    Liked by 1 person

  9. Denis1950 at 9:05 pm #

    A lot of power here Vashti, well done.

    Liked by 1 person

  10. martin houghton at 1:52 pm #

    Fab. Powerful. Thank you.

    Liked by 1 person

  11. Marje @ Kyrosmagica at 4:16 pm #

    Powerful piece of writing and haiku Vashti. 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  12. Cathy Kennedy at 8:10 am #

    Ooo, sounds creepy! That person better stay on his meds or the person within is sure to cause a lot of problems!


    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega at 11:36 am #

      Exactly! You nailed it, Cathy. Ha, ha! That’s the moral of the story––stay on your meds, not just for your sake but for the sake of others as well. Thanks so much for stopping by and reading. ❤ xx

      Liked by 1 person

  13. kcg1974 at 12:53 pm #

    Fantastic prose, Vashti. Your words drew me with the illustration to match perfectly. Excellent.

    Liked by 1 person

  14. magarisa at 7:05 pm #

    What an engaging story about daily mental struggles!

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega at 6:33 pm #

      Daily mental struggles of a man diagnosed with ‘Dissociate Identity Disorder’. He suffers from multiple personalities and one of them is pretty scary. 😉 I’m happy it captivated you. Thank you for reading. 😀

      Liked by 1 person

  15. stacilys at 12:19 pm #

    Wow! That’s intense. The image marries perfectly with your prose Vashti. As we say in Portuguese, “Parabens!” (Congratulations).
    Hope you are well.
    🙂 ❤

    Liked by 1 person

  16. Brandi Raae at 5:52 pm #

    I couldn’t help but think about the demon possession stories that I’ve read in the Bible. Never heard of that disorder – sounds awful. 😦 Thanks for linking up at Literacy Musing Mondays.

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega at 12:55 pm #

      Hi Brandi. I’m sure it is awful. Some people claim that diseases are demons trying to wreak havoc in our bodies. I don’t know about that but I can only imagine it must feel that way to those poor people suffering from mental disorders. It was a pleasure linking up at ‘Literacy Musing Mondays’. Thank you for stopping by and reading. I appreciate you taking the time. 😀


  17. jaye22 at 5:18 pm #

    Hi Vashti
    Great choice of words, I felt every word.
    Your flash fiction has thrilling dark tones I read it twice and going to read it again x x x

    Liked by 1 person

  18. Vashti Quiroz-Vega at 4:01 pm #

    Thank you Traci!


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