Haiku Friday – Breeze & Blow

24 Mar

Welcome to The Writer Next Door blog! Happy Haiku Friday!


Breeze and Blow are this week’s prompt words chosen by Ronovan Hester of Ronovan Writes.

Ron hosts a challenge that anyone could participate in called Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Prompt Challenge every Monday, and you have until Sunday to create a post featuring your haiku poem. He is an author and poet and also does author interviews and much more on his blog. Be sure to check it out. Read Ron’s Haiku Prompt Challenge Guidelines for more information.

  • I decided to share an excerpt from my WIP, The Fall of Lilith. The Fall of Lilith is a young adult/adult Fantasy with dark elements about angels. I hope you enjoy.

The Fall of Lilith, The Writer Next Door, Vashti Q, Poetry, Haiku_Friday, excerpt, novel

Illustration by Luis Royo

 When Lilith arrived at the tree, she marveled at its brilliance. She coiled her tail around its base, slid to a branch, and plucked one of its blushing fruit. She stared at it, but hesitated to put it in her mouth, recalling what happened when she bit into the fruit from the other tree.

The fruit was like none she had ever seen, draped in shiny reddish-gold. It was cold and smooth in her hand. She placed her mouth over it and sank her bloodstained teeth into its crisp, delicious flesh. The fruit squirted its sweet, succulent juice into her mouth. Its scent swathed her like a dip in a pool of warm water, conjuring images of Heaven’s light and bathing in the River of Life. The aroma was bright, cheerful, and more fragrant than any flower in Heaven’s Triumph Gardens.

Upon finishing the magnificent fruit, she began to undergo a transformation. She grew stronger, full of energy and vitality. The eyes on her wings gained the power of sight, having been of no use in the past. Now she saw in every direction at once, except directly behind her. The feathers in her wings became lustrous and able to withstand extreme temperatures. The inner frame of her wings became stronger, capable of enduring powerful impacts. Her tail grew longer and robust. The colors of her lower half were alluring and intense. She knew she was becoming godlike.

Blinding flashes of lightning sliced through the sky. Thunder, which followed closely, shook the ground. As the wind grew stronger, the numerous trees in the Garden began to disintegrate one by one. The dust left behind by the crumbling trees blew to and fro in the increasing wind. Flowers and greeneries no longer crooned melodies. The vegetation wailed and screeched as it ceased to exist.

Lilith scanned her surroundings. The colors of the Garden were gone, and only dreariness remained as it all turned to sand. She released the Tree of Life and leapt to the ground before it, too, dissolved. She lifted her eyes to the sky, now an ominous dark gray. A jagged bolt of lightning struck nearby; she screamed. Overhead thunder continued to rumble, boom, and clash. She jumped as her hands flew to cover her ears. She slithered ahead, leaning into the wind. Dirt and debris whizzed by her, whipping her face and body. She pressed her eyelids together against the sting of the violent wind. A heavy, humid smell spread through the air. The Garden of Eden was in turmoil. If she did not exit soon, she would suffer the wrath of God.

She flapped her wings. Thick, turbulent winds attacked her from every direction, making it difficult for her to take flight. Beating her powerful wings faster she lifted herself off the ground. She moved through the dense, forceful atmosphere, and finally escaped. Had she not eaten from the Tree of Life and gained supernatural powers, she would have perished. Once more, she headed to the cover of the forest. She settled on the tallest tree where she could overlook the destruction of paradise.

The wind grew stronger

Garden trees turned to grey dust

Eden’s colors blown

Flowers no longer sang, but

wailed as they ceased to exist

61 Responses to “Haiku Friday – Breeze & Blow”

  1. olganm March 24, 2017 at 3:35 pm #

    Beautifully descriptive and vivid writing, Vashti. I’m very curious about this book. Good luck!

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 24, 2017 at 4:08 pm #

      Thank you Olga. I plan to release it right before Summer. Fingers crossed. 🙂


  2. Gayl March 24, 2017 at 4:10 pm #

    I agree with the previous commenter – your descriptions are so vivid and mysterious! The poem fits right in. 🙂 As an aside, my newest granddaughter’s name is Lilith! 🙂 Blessings!

    Liked by 1 person

  3. Annette Rochelle Aben March 24, 2017 at 4:19 pm #

    Engaging and exciting. If I closed my eyes, I could walk right into this. Well done.

    Liked by 1 person

  4. magarisa March 24, 2017 at 6:50 pm #

    So vivid and powerful! I really enjoyed this.

    Liked by 1 person

  5. coldhandboyack March 24, 2017 at 9:11 pm #

    Very nicely done.

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  6. Janice March 25, 2017 at 12:21 am #

    Very rich and vivid prose. I like the image of wailing and screeching flowers and vegetation.

    Liked by 1 person

  7. storybuss March 25, 2017 at 2:51 pm #

    I love writings like this. Well done 🙂 very moving atmosphere.


  8. tracikenworth March 25, 2017 at 4:56 pm #

    Wow, Vashti! I can’t WAIT to read this! This sounds amazing!

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 25, 2017 at 10:33 pm #

      Aw, thank you so much, Traci❣I’m so happy you enjoyed the excerpt. I can’t wait to finally release this book.😙💕

      Liked by 1 person

      • tracikenworth March 26, 2017 at 1:21 pm #

        I’ve always been fascinated by the tale of Lilith. Can’t wait to see what you do with her!

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  9. doreen@foxdenrd March 25, 2017 at 11:30 pm #

    This is most definitely a compelling and vivid read vashti! Loved it! The book will be awesome!

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 26, 2017 at 10:42 am #

      I’m so glad you think so, Doreen. It means a lot to me. Thank you. ❤ xx


  10. Sunni Morris March 26, 2017 at 12:32 am #

    You’re definitely a gifted writer. Your descriptions bring the reader into your world. Well done.

    Liked by 2 people

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 26, 2017 at 10:44 am #

      Hi Sunni! What writer wouldn’t want to read your comment? So special. Thank you very much! 😀 xx


  11. Denis1950 March 26, 2017 at 8:38 pm #

    Incredible imagination Vashti, are there any hidden memories surfacing from a distant past?

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 27, 2017 at 1:53 pm #

      I went to a private religious school all through elementary, middle and high school, I’ve read many books on stories from the Bible, Torah, Qur’an and lots of Mythology. I’ve also read many dark fantasy, horror and suspense novels––I still do. I guess everything I’ve learned, read and experienced in my life influences my stories . . . and I’ve always had a big imagination. 😉 Thank you for reading the excerpt and for your comment, Denis. I appreciate it. 😀 xx


  12. dgkaye March 27, 2017 at 1:53 am #

    You’re always beautifully descriptive prose in your haikus, shines through in your WIP. I have no doubts you’ll have readers flocking to you. ❤

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 27, 2017 at 1:58 pm #

      From your mouth to God’s ear, Debby. Nothing would make me happier. I’ve worked so hard and so long on this book and I’m so nervous to release it, but the time has come. I’m hoping to release it just before Summer or early Summer. Thank you so much for the kind and inspiring words. ❤ xx

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  13. jaye22 March 27, 2017 at 10:56 am #

    Hi Vashti, beautiful, you have set the scene now and I am looking forward to your book, love your graphics it must take ages but you always manage to tie your words in with your graphics so well, very powerful x x x

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 27, 2017 at 2:01 pm #

      Hello my sweet friend! I love art and I feel that it goes hand in hand with storytelling. Thank you for mentioning that and for the encouraging words. ❤ xx

      Liked by 1 person

  14. Olga March 27, 2017 at 12:59 pm #

    Wow! Couldn’t stop reading this wonderful excerpt and wanted to read more. What an amazing creation, Vashti. Such an abundance of vivid imagery to tantalize the reader. Loved it. The use of the word “wailed” in the tanka is so emotionally powerful. ❤

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    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 27, 2017 at 2:03 pm #

      Thank you very much, Olga. That’s just what I wanted to read some write about it. I’m so happy you enjoyed the excerpt and Tanka. ❤ xx

      Liked by 1 person

  15. stacilys March 27, 2017 at 2:37 pm #

    Vashti, that was intense. Great writing. You really paint a picture. And the poem went perfect with the excerpt from your novel.
    Hope you had a wonderful weekend.
    🙂 ❤

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 27, 2017 at 4:29 pm #

      Hi Staci! So happy you enjoyed it. I had a great weekend. I hope yours was wonderful too. Thank you! ❤ xx

      Liked by 1 person

      • stacilys April 6, 2017 at 3:38 pm #

        So sorry for the delay in responding Vashti. My life has been crazy busy. Ugh. I’m needing some time to create. Hahaha.
        Hope you are well, and please enjoy the rest of your day.
        🙂 ❤

        Liked by 1 person

  16. Smorgasbord - Variety is the Spice of Life. March 28, 2017 at 12:44 pm #

    Great excerpt Vashti.. fabulous images too.. x

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  17. Joy Lenton March 28, 2017 at 2:04 pm #

    Wow, what a beautiful, compelling, engaging piece – extract, haiku and imagery! Your poetically descriptive words draw the reader in with anticipation, longing to know what happens next. This is great, Vashti! xo ❤

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 28, 2017 at 11:56 pm #

      Hello Joy! Thank you for your beautiful and inspiring comment. I’m happy that you liked the excerpt and Tanka.😙💕

      Liked by 1 person

  18. allan hudson March 29, 2017 at 7:22 am #

    Love the descriptions. Well done Vashti!

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Quiroz-Vega March 29, 2017 at 12:36 pm #

      Hi Allan! I’m so happy to hear from you! Thank you for reading and for the cool comment. 😀


  19. Prakash Hegade April 3, 2017 at 7:32 am #

    The description was poetic. Lilith portrays several transformations and perspectives from fruit to paradise. It was a nice read. Leaves behind a lot of thoughts and questions too. 🙂

    nice haiku too… 🙂

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  20. Marje @ Kyrosmagica May 19, 2017 at 3:09 am #

    Love the extract and haiku Vashti. I have a feeling I shall have to add you to my TBR List!

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Q May 19, 2017 at 2:09 pm #

      Yay! That would be awesome. Thank you Marje! ❤ xx


  21. Marje @ Kyrosmagica March 2, 2018 at 5:39 am #

    Excellent haiku Vashti. Happy Friday to you! Hope all is going well with you. Did you decide upon a name for Book 2? By the way I sent you a message on FB messenger just checking you got it okay?


    • Vashti Q March 4, 2018 at 2:24 pm #

      Hi Marje! All is well. I hope you’re having a great weekend. I’ll have to check FBM for your message. I get so many notifications on my phone screen that I can sometimes miss a couple. Thanks for letting me know. Right now, I’m thinking of going with “Son of the Serpent”, because the word serpent represents Lilith without having to mention her name and Dracúl is represented, because he’s her son. That way I won’t have to use his name in the title, because of the whole “vampire vibes” thing. I’m not 100% convinced but it is growing on me. My husband seems to really like it.
      I’m glad you liked the haiku! Thank you! ❤

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      • Marje @ Kyrosmagica March 4, 2018 at 2:32 pm #

        Hi Vashti. I’m doing good thanks. Had a lovely weekend been out for lunch today with my hubby and my youngest daughter Georgina. Back to work tomorrow! As far as son of the serpent goes I think if you get the cover art right it will be great. Hope you’ve had a great weekend. 🙂

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      • Vashti Q March 4, 2018 at 8:28 pm #

        Sounds like you had a great weekend. I did too, nice and peaceful. I have some good ideas for the cover, so let’s hope for the best. 😉 Thank you!

        Liked by 1 person

      • Marje @ Kyrosmagica March 5, 2018 at 1:57 pm #

        You’re welcome Vashti. Happy Monday to you!

        Liked by 1 person

  22. mihrank March 4, 2018 at 2:28 pm #

    Vashti – this is greatly written and well balanced…This book is so interesting to read and enjoy the adventure in each chapter..

    Liked by 1 person

    • Vashti Q March 4, 2018 at 8:30 pm #

      Thank you very much, Mino! I appreciate it. ❤



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