Welcome to The Writer Next Door blog! Happy Haiku Friday!
Breeze and Blow are this week’s prompt words chosen by Ronovan Hester of Ronovan Writes.
Ron hosts a challenge that anyone could participate in called Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Prompt Challenge every Monday, and you have until Sunday to create a post featuring your haiku poem. He is an author and poet and also does author interviews and much more on his blog. Be sure to check it out. Read Ron’s Haiku Prompt Challenge Guidelines for more information.
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I decided to share an excerpt from my WIP, The Fall of Lilith. The Fall of Lilith is a young adult/adult Fantasy with dark elements about angels. I hope you enjoy.
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When Lilith arrived at the tree, she marveled at its brilliance. She coiled her tail around its base, slid to a branch, and plucked one of its blushing fruit. She stared at it, but hesitated to put it in her mouth, recalling what happened when she bit into the fruit from the other tree.
The fruit was like none she had ever seen, draped in shiny reddish-gold. It was cold and smooth in her hand. She placed her mouth over it and sank her bloodstained teeth into its crisp, delicious flesh. The fruit squirted its sweet, succulent juice into her mouth. Its scent swathed her like a dip in a pool of warm water, conjuring images of Heaven’s light and bathing in the River of Life. The aroma was bright, cheerful, and more fragrant than any flower in Heaven’s Triumph Gardens.
Upon finishing the magnificent fruit, she began to undergo a transformation. She grew stronger, full of energy and vitality. The eyes on her wings gained the power of sight, having been of no use in the past. Now she saw in every direction at once, except directly behind her. The feathers in her wings became lustrous and able to withstand extreme temperatures. The inner frame of her wings became stronger, capable of enduring powerful impacts. Her tail grew longer and robust. The colors of her lower half were alluring and intense. She knew she was becoming godlike.
Blinding flashes of lightning sliced through the sky. Thunder, which followed closely, shook the ground. As the wind grew stronger, the numerous trees in the Garden began to disintegrate one by one. The dust left behind by the crumbling trees blew to and fro in the increasing wind. Flowers and greeneries no longer crooned melodies. The vegetation wailed and screeched as it ceased to exist.
Lilith scanned her surroundings. The colors of the Garden were gone, and only dreariness remained as it all turned to sand. She released the Tree of Life and leapt to the ground before it, too, dissolved. She lifted her eyes to the sky, now an ominous dark gray. A jagged bolt of lightning struck nearby; she screamed. Overhead thunder continued to rumble, boom, and clash. She jumped as her hands flew to cover her ears. She slithered ahead, leaning into the wind. Dirt and debris whizzed by her, whipping her face and body. She pressed her eyelids together against the sting of the violent wind. A heavy, humid smell spread through the air. The Garden of Eden was in turmoil. If she did not exit soon, she would suffer the wrath of God.
She flapped her wings. Thick, turbulent winds attacked her from every direction, making it difficult for her to take flight. Beating her powerful wings faster she lifted herself off the ground. She moved through the dense, forceful atmosphere, and finally escaped. Had she not eaten from the Tree of Life and gained supernatural powers, she would have perished. Once more, she headed to the cover of the forest. She settled on the tallest tree where she could overlook the destruction of paradise.
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The wind grew stronger
Garden trees turned to grey dust
Eden’s colors blown
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Flowers no longer sang, but
wailed as they ceased to exist
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Beautifully descriptive and vivid writing, Vashti. I’m very curious about this book. Good luck!
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Thank you Olga. I plan to release it right before Summer. Fingers crossed. 🙂
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I agree with the previous commenter – your descriptions are so vivid and mysterious! The poem fits right in. 🙂 As an aside, my newest granddaughter’s name is Lilith! 🙂 Blessings!
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Hi Gayl! Thank you. Congrats! Your grandbaby’s name is pretty. 😉 xx
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Engaging and exciting. If I closed my eyes, I could walk right into this. Well done.
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I’m so happy you enjoyed it, Annette. Thank you. ❤ xx
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So vivid and powerful! I really enjoyed this.
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That means a lot. Thank you. 🙂 xx
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You’re welcome, Vashti. You’re a great writer. 😊
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Thank you. You made my night. 😉
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I meant it sincerely. Glad to hear that!
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Very nicely done.
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Thank you, Craig. Have a great night. 🙂
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Very rich and vivid prose. I like the image of wailing and screeching flowers and vegetation.
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Thank you Janice. I’m happy you enjoyed it.😁👍
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I love writings like this. Well done 🙂 very moving atmosphere.
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I’m glad you enjoyed it. Thank you! 😀
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Wow, Vashti! I can’t WAIT to read this! This sounds amazing!
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Aw, thank you so much, Traci❣I’m so happy you enjoyed the excerpt. I can’t wait to finally release this book.😙💕
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I’ve always been fascinated by the tale of Lilith. Can’t wait to see what you do with her!
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This is most definitely a compelling and vivid read vashti! Loved it! The book will be awesome!
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I’m so glad you think so, Doreen. It means a lot to me. Thank you. ❤ xx
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You’re definitely a gifted writer. Your descriptions bring the reader into your world. Well done.
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Hi Sunni! What writer wouldn’t want to read your comment? So special. Thank you very much! 😀 xx
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Incredible imagination Vashti, are there any hidden memories surfacing from a distant past?
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I went to a private religious school all through elementary, middle and high school, I’ve read many books on stories from the Bible, Torah, Qur’an and lots of Mythology. I’ve also read many dark fantasy, horror and suspense novels––I still do. I guess everything I’ve learned, read and experienced in my life influences my stories . . . and I’ve always had a big imagination. 😉 Thank you for reading the excerpt and for your comment, Denis. I appreciate it. 😀 xx
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You’re always beautifully descriptive prose in your haikus, shines through in your WIP. I have no doubts you’ll have readers flocking to you. ❤
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From your mouth to God’s ear, Debby. Nothing would make me happier. I’ve worked so hard and so long on this book and I’m so nervous to release it, but the time has come. I’m hoping to release it just before Summer or early Summer. Thank you so much for the kind and inspiring words. ❤ xx
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My pleasure Vashti. And I look forward to reading it! ❤ xo
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Yay! Thank you. ❤ xx
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Hi Vashti, beautiful, you have set the scene now and I am looking forward to your book, love your graphics it must take ages but you always manage to tie your words in with your graphics so well, very powerful x x x
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Hello my sweet friend! I love art and I feel that it goes hand in hand with storytelling. Thank you for mentioning that and for the encouraging words. ❤ xx
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Wow! Couldn’t stop reading this wonderful excerpt and wanted to read more. What an amazing creation, Vashti. Such an abundance of vivid imagery to tantalize the reader. Loved it. The use of the word “wailed” in the tanka is so emotionally powerful. ❤
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Thank you very much, Olga. That’s just what I wanted to read some write about it. I’m so happy you enjoyed the excerpt and Tanka. ❤ xx
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Vashti, that was intense. Great writing. You really paint a picture. And the poem went perfect with the excerpt from your novel.
Hope you had a wonderful weekend.
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Hi Staci! So happy you enjoyed it. I had a great weekend. I hope yours was wonderful too. Thank you! ❤ xx
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So sorry for the delay in responding Vashti. My life has been crazy busy. Ugh. I’m needing some time to create. Hahaha.
Hope you are well, and please enjoy the rest of your day.
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Great excerpt Vashti.. fabulous images too.. x
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Thank you Sally! I’m glad you stopped by and liked the post. Means a lot.👏😁
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Wow, what a beautiful, compelling, engaging piece – extract, haiku and imagery! Your poetically descriptive words draw the reader in with anticipation, longing to know what happens next. This is great, Vashti! xo ❤
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Hello Joy! Thank you for your beautiful and inspiring comment. I’m happy that you liked the excerpt and Tanka.😙💕
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Love the descriptions. Well done Vashti!
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Hi Allan! I’m so happy to hear from you! Thank you for reading and for the cool comment. 😀
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The description was poetic. Lilith portrays several transformations and perspectives from fruit to paradise. It was a nice read. Leaves behind a lot of thoughts and questions too. 🙂
nice haiku too… 🙂
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Thank you for reading, Prakash and for your comment. I appreciate your insight. 🙂 xx
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Pleasure is all mine.. 🙂
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Love the extract and haiku Vashti. I have a feeling I shall have to add you to my TBR List!
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Yay! That would be awesome. Thank you Marje! ❤ xx
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Excellent haiku Vashti. Happy Friday to you! Hope all is going well with you. Did you decide upon a name for Book 2? By the way I sent you a message on FB messenger just checking you got it okay?
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Hi Marje! All is well. I hope you’re having a great weekend. I’ll have to check FBM for your message. I get so many notifications on my phone screen that I can sometimes miss a couple. Thanks for letting me know. Right now, I’m thinking of going with “Son of the Serpent”, because the word serpent represents Lilith without having to mention her name and Dracúl is represented, because he’s her son. That way I won’t have to use his name in the title, because of the whole “vampire vibes” thing. I’m not 100% convinced but it is growing on me. My husband seems to really like it.
I’m glad you liked the haiku! Thank you! ❤
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Hi Vashti. I’m doing good thanks. Had a lovely weekend been out for lunch today with my hubby and my youngest daughter Georgina. Back to work tomorrow! As far as son of the serpent goes I think if you get the cover art right it will be great. Hope you’ve had a great weekend. 🙂
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Sounds like you had a great weekend. I did too, nice and peaceful. I have some good ideas for the cover, so let’s hope for the best. 😉 Thank you!
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You’re welcome Vashti. Happy Monday to you!
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Vashti – this is greatly written and well balanced…This book is so interesting to read and enjoy the adventure in each chapter..
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Thank you very much, Mino! I appreciate it. ❤
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